Thursday, May 15, 2008

The Mighty Writer (New Poem) with Commentary

"The Mighty Writer"
by Tim Kavi

at bed time
she said
are you writing again?
yes
because of you
I am
a mighty writer
in love

so you must
tame me
yes tame me

with those
mountains
in the distance
see them?

your ruby
red lips

oh you are
doing a poem again?
she said

no this
is real life
I replied

look at the great
valley
and the infinities
of your
love's ocean views

I am the explorer
of all of you
kissing every inch
and centimeter
of your world

kissing you
from your
toes
to your head

time for bed
she said
laughing

but I was
preparing the
goddess
for her sleep

I adore her
so
her love
makes us
whole

sweet goddess
I worship you
even as
goddess is
about to be
sleeping

she said
oh
and sure!

and giggled
like Sarah*

as the lights
faded.

(*Sarah is a reference to
Genesis 18:12)

Poet's Commentary: The intimate nature of this poem in my opinion, is inescapable, we have a couple readying for bed, but he is a poet and she is his beloved. Equally we have the spiritual seeker at meditation and worship before retiring. These are parallel realities. While the natural scenery of the majestic qualities of nature are often evident in many of my poems--my natural realities place the feminine directly in the center. The goddess herself is at home in the middle of nature as any perceived sight in Nature. There are maybe not so vague references to the feminine form in this poem, as the mountains and the valley below may be anatomical in nature (excuse the pun 'in nature') but increases the sexual tension at bedtime. There is also a blending of the sacred with the everyday, as her form is adored but she is ready for sleeping. Finally, there is the Biblical reference to Sarah, Genesis 18:12, which is sometimes mentioned as a "great laugh" which I have downplayed somewhat as a giggle--but only to capture the sense that they are retiring in sleep, and not at all to diminish the feminine power. The importance of this laugh is in my humble opinion, an event that symbolizes or even acknowledges one of the core aspects of feminine power--the power of bringing forth life, as in giving birth. We look ot the feminine for that. In the Biblical context (and there are many intrepretations of this) Sarah laughs at God's promise that she will bear a child--because this would be a miracle birth--as she is well beyond child bearing years. Some say she laughed in doubt, but many thought she laughed in joy. To me the fact that the woman in this poem "giggled" at bedtime is another symbol of feminine fertility. Especially n light of the fact that this couple may soon have relations or miraculously not (yet she conceives). The prinicple of miracle births are contained in other spiritual examples and traditions as well. Finally, there is a sense of humor in this poem that is intended, in the manner and dialogue where she responds to his comments about poetry. She almost yawns, because after all she is the goddess, and she knows already that she is worshipped. ;-) The fact that poems and songs are written about her should be no surprise!

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